Sunday, 30 October 2011

Real Toads mini-challenge

Imaginary Garden with Real Toads offers a mini-challenge, to use the Waltz Wave Form in response to the prompt.

The Waltz Wave Form requires 38 syllables over 19 lines, in the following configuration:-

 1,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,3,4,3,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,1

Below is the picture prompt (by one of my favourite painters) followed by my attempt
'The Singing Butler' by Jack Vettriano

Dance
With me,
Sway
With me –
Let us whirl
And twirl,
Two
As one
Together
‘Til music ends
Forever.
We’ll dream,
Sigh
Softly,
For always
We shall
Keep
This joy
Pure.

19 comments:

  1. The waltzing rhythm is very apparent in your poem. Very romantic.
    Thank you for participating on Real Toads.

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  2. Beautiful, Janice! I love it.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  3. Good luck with the dancing. Nice painting.

    Greetings,
    Filip

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  4. Yes, congratulations on not only matching your subject to the form but also really using the rhythm. Enjoyed this, thank you.

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  5. I think you've got it. I for one, however, cannot dance (well.)

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  6. This is really good. I am finding it really helpful ... this time around reading this "form" poem by others before I attempt my own.

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  7. Hm ... I just posted a comment, I thought. Ah well. I really enjoyed your poem. I am finding it helpful to read the work of others in this "form" as it is inspiring me.

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  8. I can almost feel the rhythm of the music as I read your poem. Beautifully done!

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  9. This seems teasingly difficult, but I think I must have a go at it. Thanks for showing what it can do.

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  10. Absolutely beautiful. In my head it sounded as a very romantic love song.

    (wv = upsyler. Is that the opposite of abseiler?)

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  11. So, were you waltzing when you wrote this?

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  12. Friko - of course - head's still spinning.

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  13. great poem and fits the form well, flows very nicely.

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  14. flows nicely, great poem, fits the form well.

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