tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post5970428668565912367..comments2024-03-28T18:29:18.656+00:00Comments on jabblog: Saturday Centus #72jabbloghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12176958811589489979noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-39608566024450816872011-09-29T18:16:22.655+01:002011-09-29T18:16:22.655+01:00Bravo! This is absolutely brilliant! Loved bot...Bravo! This is absolutely brilliant! Loved both of these!<br /><br />You really nailed this difficult prompt!<br /><br />Go you!Jennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12462124067637610359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-24200745375334380312011-09-21T04:10:24.853+01:002011-09-21T04:10:24.853+01:00I like them both. Getting down to 29 words is qui...I like them both. Getting down to 29 words is quite an accomplishment.Janiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06509431336916594990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-85409186044657896532011-09-20T10:28:56.128+01:002011-09-20T10:28:56.128+01:00Very impressive, 32 words isn't much. I really...Very impressive, 32 words isn't much. I really like your second one. The year is going downhill fast.SquirrelQueenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00634513897599275287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-91635215215771811172011-09-19T19:10:30.838+01:002011-09-19T19:10:30.838+01:00They were both awesome. Standing ovation.They were both awesome. Standing ovation.Dazee Dreamerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08323163539682131873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-60238635891816677452011-09-18T20:56:39.249+01:002011-09-18T20:56:39.249+01:00Both efforts are fantastic!! It's been so fun ...Both efforts are fantastic!! It's been so fun reading everyones take on Autumn!! =)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-22123016652486111452011-09-18T13:03:51.461+01:002011-09-18T13:03:51.461+01:00I like both of these attempts at lyrics.
You'...I like both of these attempts at lyrics. <br /><br />You've got some interesting Autumn imagery, especially in the first one. You could rework that one and let it just be a poem that does not have to be sung. <br /><br />If you really want to write good song lyrics, may I suggest that you pick fewer images, make them simpler and make certain that the rhyme and meter works for the song. Prove-sing it. Don't be afraid to repeat the same line as is done in the original song. Make it so good that it is worth repeating.<br /><br />There's a song there still, that 'wants to come out'.<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><a href="http://annasadornments.blogspot.com/2011/09/in-autumn-mrs-jenny-matlocks-saturday.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's SC wk 72'In the Autumn'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-20615160558557927102011-09-18T08:49:13.097+01:002011-09-18T08:49:13.097+01:00No doubt ! there is a hidden poet in you !No doubt ! there is a hidden poet in you !Gattinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06636525277807715146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-12806430848179698442011-09-18T04:09:03.076+01:002011-09-18T04:09:03.076+01:00Falling leaves and bonfires! These are great ima...Falling leaves and bonfires! These are great images, and I think you should get some sort of combat pay for actually writing two of these things.<br /><br />Namaste...............cjcj Schlottmanhttp://cjschlottman-mypoems.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-18106779569517163792011-09-18T03:13:55.288+01:002011-09-18T03:13:55.288+01:00I liked both of them very much. I'm surprised...I liked both of them very much. I'm surprised you could come up with 2 LOL. Great job.Vikihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14421161703991840468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-9473830873383049562011-09-18T03:05:19.046+01:002011-09-18T03:05:19.046+01:00Both were so good. I had to do away with some of ...Both were so good. I had to do away with some of my words before I published. That was a hard one. laurie @ Battling My Inner CriticBargain Decorating with Lauriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13582640485560903639noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-35316189315593530242011-09-18T00:03:17.322+01:002011-09-18T00:03:17.322+01:00OMGosh...Both are equally excellent and I enjoyed ...OMGosh...Both are equally excellent and I enjoyed them very much !!!<br /><br />BTW, I also love that you stuck with it and showed us your 1st draft and final poem/lyrics...Bravo !Nonnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03227580166409342214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-91803940226122211032011-09-17T21:50:41.897+01:002011-09-17T21:50:41.897+01:00Enjoyed both, well written pieces...I can understa...Enjoyed both, well written pieces...I can understand the downhill feeling though it never gets that cold out here.Rek Seshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13484322426994645221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-74948889059924666102011-09-17T21:29:43.144+01:002011-09-17T21:29:43.144+01:00Both are good! Thanks.Both are good! Thanks.Kathy Felsted Usherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10471923897561942341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-89626802847678704822011-09-17T20:44:21.884+01:002011-09-17T20:44:21.884+01:00I loved them both, but 'This year’s going stra...I loved them both, but 'This year’s going straight downhill' really made me laugh :o)Deborahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06231195313149947101noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-25251863896985167882011-09-17T19:01:13.877+01:002011-09-17T19:01:13.877+01:00This is great, both pieces - a fun sensory experie...This is great, both pieces - a fun sensory experience. I especially like your final line. After summer, it does go downhill.Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15997241410192066577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-4223077694126906912011-09-17T18:56:51.518+01:002011-09-17T18:56:51.518+01:00Good job. That wasn't many words to work with!...Good job. That wasn't many words to work with!<br /><br />=)Susan Andersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16049586085703324088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-70914213146712924442011-09-17T18:41:57.035+01:002011-09-17T18:41:57.035+01:00That was awesome! I think you nailed it with numbe...That was awesome! I think you nailed it with number 2!~AmesAmeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15074479473400202674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-3194148635120311642011-09-17T18:22:22.305+01:002011-09-17T18:22:22.305+01:00you know autumn well..
awesome pieces.you know autumn well..<br />awesome pieces.Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05532576755186051550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-1388034223162712992011-09-17T18:14:55.481+01:002011-09-17T18:14:55.481+01:00I like them both but the second really got me chuc...I like them both but the second really got me chuckling.Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14843459906469325667noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-22909326319776333982011-09-17T18:02:13.836+01:002011-09-17T18:02:13.836+01:00Both are fun, I like #2:@)Both are fun, I like #2:@)Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13420480574010238475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-74723099138412211372011-09-17T17:42:26.324+01:002011-09-17T17:42:26.324+01:00Love them both! Very nice in an excellent kind of ...Love them both! Very nice in an excellent kind of way! :o)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01169693305157071792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-16860042847242093252011-09-17T17:24:06.719+01:002011-09-17T17:24:06.719+01:00Oh well done you! It was quite a mathematical exer...Oh well done you! It was quite a mathematical exercise wasn't it. I love them both!<br /><br />There's a picture prompt here is you fancy!http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2011/09/12/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week-10/jfb57https://www.blogger.com/profile/17876700842985406565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-55661940184824823122011-09-17T17:15:44.616+01:002011-09-17T17:15:44.616+01:00I like both. This was a tough one for me too!I like both. This was a tough one for me too!Debra Gray-Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13836657468924341727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-74529269142037096932011-09-17T17:14:47.355+01:002011-09-17T17:14:47.355+01:00Good job!!!! I guess I forgot to count my words--...Good job!!!! I guess I forgot to count my words---hmmmmm, I'd better check!!Judiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02778815502961000469noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2060029060849550094.post-69674554354982318392011-09-17T16:54:10.417+01:002011-09-17T16:54:10.417+01:00Whew! I've been trying some more writing exerc...Whew! I've been trying some more writing exercises lately, but I don't know if I could have managed that one. Good for you, Janice!<br />— K<br /><br />Kay, Alberta, Canada<br />An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous TravelKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.com