Sunday, 30 October 2011

Real Toads mini-challenge

Imaginary Garden with Real Toads offers a mini-challenge, to use the Waltz Wave Form in response to the prompt.

The Waltz Wave Form requires 38 syllables over 19 lines, in the following configuration:-

 1,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,3,4,3,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,1

Below is the picture prompt (by one of my favourite painters) followed by my attempt
'The Singing Butler' by Jack Vettriano

Dance
With me,
Sway
With me –
Let us whirl
And twirl,
Two
As one
Together
‘Til music ends
Forever.
We’ll dream,
Sigh
Softly,
For always
We shall
Keep
This joy
Pure.
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19 comments:

  1. Kerry O'Connor30 October 2011 at 18:47

    The waltzing rhythm is very apparent in your poem. Very romantic.
    Thank you for participating on Real Toads.

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  2. Kay L. Davies30 October 2011 at 19:26

    Beautiful, Janice! I love it.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  3. FilipBlog30 October 2011 at 19:52

    Good luck with the dancing. Nice painting.

    Greetings,
    Filip

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  4. Titus30 October 2011 at 22:00

    Yes, congratulations on not only matching your subject to the form but also really using the rhythm. Enjoyed this, thank you.

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  5. Unknown31 October 2011 at 00:00

    I think you've got it. I for one, however, cannot dance (well.)

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  6. Liz Rice-Sosne31 October 2011 at 02:51

    This is really good. I am finding it really helpful ... this time around reading this "form" poem by others before I attempt my own.

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  7. Liz Rice-Sosne31 October 2011 at 02:53

    Hm ... I just posted a comment, I thought. Ah well. I really enjoyed your poem. I am finding it helpful to read the work of others in this "form" as it is inspiring me.

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  8. Deborah31 October 2011 at 07:35

    Oh that's beautifully done.

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  9. Isabel Doyle31 October 2011 at 07:50

    It swings!

    Lovely

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  10. SquirrelQueen31 October 2011 at 08:23

    I can almost feel the rhythm of the music as I read your poem. Beautifully done!

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  11. Dave King31 October 2011 at 09:24

    This seems teasingly difficult, but I think I must have a go at it. Thanks for showing what it can do.

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  12. jabblog31 October 2011 at 11:55

    Thank you, folks:-)

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  13. Carolina31 October 2011 at 12:21

    Absolutely beautiful. In my head it sounded as a very romantic love song.

    (wv = upsyler. Is that the opposite of abseiler?)

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  14. jabblog31 October 2011 at 16:06

    Carolina - could be;-)

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  15. Maude Lynn31 October 2011 at 17:05

    Great job! Lovely write.

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  16. Friko31 October 2011 at 17:35

    So, were you waltzing when you wrote this?

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  17. jabblog31 October 2011 at 18:21

    Friko - of course - head's still spinning.

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  18. Lillian Susan Thomas31 October 2011 at 19:38

    great poem and fits the form well, flows very nicely.

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  19. Lillian Susan Thomas31 October 2011 at 19:39

    flows nicely, great poem, fits the form well.

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