Sunday, 29 May 2011

Succinctly Yours Week 10

Grandma's Goulash at Succinctly Yours hosts this microfiction meme. Each week she posts a photographic prompt for inspiration and the challenge is to write a story using no more than 140 characters or words. Below is this week's photo followed by my offering.
The young motorcyclist made her eyes glisten. She was pleased he wore a crash helmet. If her son had worn one he would still be alive.
(134 characters)

21 comments:

  1. A poignant moment at the end there. Excellent write.

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  2. Hmm, I've lost a neighbour who tested out his motorcycle after he repaired something, didn't wear a helmet and crashed in our street. So... yes...

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  3. ugh if only they were all smart enough to wear one...or at least one that will help..some wear brain buckets barely large enough to do much...

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  4. You got a lot into 140 characters!

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  5. That's so true ! My son lost a friend like that.

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  6. Oh, such a SAD one! Here it's illegal to ride without a helmet.

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  7. Whoa. What a scared-straight flash tale! Today, I am ever so glad to know that the word "microfiction" describes Succintly Yours.

    I think I'll have that coffee now. Better yet, a mixed drink, because, sadly to say (and although it wasn't a son), this entry really hit home.

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  8. My father wouldn't let me ride on motorcycles when I was a teen. I'm glad he didn't. You didn't have to wear helmets back then.

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  9. Aww that's is so sad. Poor lady.

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  10. Oh, sad, Janice, but very apt. Well done.
    -- Kay, Alberta, Canada

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  11. Sad words at the end. I hate seeing a motorcyclist without a helmet.

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  12. To bfind comfort in another's attention to safety is a wonderful sign of inner strength! Beautiful!

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  13. Oh so much more lying underneath this story. Well done!

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  14. Oh, this one is so poignant. I had the motorcyclist's eyes glistening as the lady reminded him of his mother.

    Good one!

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  15. Sad, but a reality for too many. Well written MF, as always.

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  16. Oh how sad, but beautifully written.

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  17. Great twist on this, Janice! One does worry about safety on a bike...it surprises me how many people try to get by without a helmet...yikes!

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  18. Awww, such a painful reality, ;-(

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  19. This is a sad take for today's photo!

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  20. A sad and pointed tale, indeed, Janice. I'm from the old days before helmets were required...what were we thinking?!

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  21. You've packed a huge emotional punch into a few words. A sad, but wonderfully done, microfiction that has plenty of food for thought.

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